Thursday, 10 July 2014

Rewriting the blurb

One of the great things about self-publishing is that if something isn't working, you can change it relatively quickly.

Another great thing is that we don't have to do it all ourselves. Our friends, family and sometimes complete strangers will offer valuable advice and help.

I tried this out last month through my author FaceBook page: http://www.facebook.com/my100goals, asking people for their views on my proposed book cover. I received some great advice and actually, the act of asking for help forced me to come up with an alternative image to use that ended up being perfect to convey a sense of Scotland's land.

I'm hoping some of you out there will be willing to help me rewrite the book blurb: the description that you either read on a book's back jacket or online.

The original blurb/description (at time of writing) can be seen on Amazon: The Great Scottish Land Grab: Book One -

Product Description - current

Can one man turn the Scottish Referendum into a revolution?

Threatened while walking across a Scottish estate, Robert Castle tries to find justice but neither the police nor courts will help him. His quest to find justice will bring him into conflict with the highest powers in the land. Facing off against politicians and judges, Castle fights to reverse centuries of corruption that has seen Scotland's land stolen from the people. With the Scottish independence referendum fast approaching, he calls on Scotland to reject the politicians lie there can only be a Yes or No vote; and to reclaim the right to decide their own future.

The Great Scottish Land Grab will be split over three books to be published in the months leading up to the Scottish referendum on independence. Book one to be published in June, book two in July and the final book released in August.
ENDS

I'm wondering about changing it.

The book description is maybe the second or third (or fourth...) thing people look at online. Book title and cover maybe being joint first, or split; reviews and description vying for next place.

Product Description - proposed

The fight for freedom starts here…

Threatened while walking across a Scottish estate, Robert Castle tries to find justice but neither the police nor courts will help him.

With the Scottish independence referendum fast approaching, Castle has to decide which side of the fence he will support. Initially a passionate supporter of the UK union he has become disillusioned with a political system that ignores the very people it is supposed to serve.

A tragic accident derails the Yes campaign but could this be the opportunity Scotland needs to recognise true independence and achieve freedom?

Robert Castle’s quest for justice will bring him into conflict with the highest powers in the land. Facing off against politicians and judges, Castle fights to reverse centuries of corruption that has seen Scotland's land stolen from the people. Castle calls on Scotland to see beyond a Yes or No vote; and to reclaim the right to decide their own future.

The Great Scottish Land Grab: Book One – Undecided? Vote to stop sitting on the fence.

The Great Scottish Land Grab: Book Two (July 2014) – Decided? Vote to tear down the fence and build a bonfire.

The Great Scottish Land Grab: Book Three (August 2014) – Committed? Vote to pour fuel on the fire of freedom.

I have to admit, I'm struggling to know how much detail to put in. I don't want to spoil the cliff hanger ending of book one, or give too much away about book two or three. Yet if I don't give enough detail, will people be willing to give the book a chance?

I don't mention Robert's wife Helen who is a main character, don't mention any of the sub plots I'm working in. But is that important?

I'd love to hear your thoughts on whether either of the above blurbs would (or have ;) encouraged you to buy book one, either in the comments below, or on my FaceBook page.

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